In one of the earlier chs, Sapphirefly had mentioned that she would like to see Van more authoritative both within Fanelia and outside. Her idea makes for a stronger Van: he is specifically reared for the throne, so he wouldn't see his responsibilities as overwhelming or restrictive, and he would be at ease the most in meetings with his staff and in talks with other heads of state. And it's true he should be that way. By now he's been officially crowned for 10 years, and he's lived and breathed his role since 5.
So I've been trying to make his responses more definite, but being someone who avoids talking if I could communicate by writing instead, it's hard to think up good lines, haha. That certain elegant dignity remains elusive despite use of active verbs, shorter sentences, and stronger words. /sigh
Today's sentence:
The audience chamber was as sparse as the rest of the castle, its only indication of authority the solitary chair underneath the brass mark of Fanelia.
And new sketch :D I'm really happy with this one. Can you tell what Van is thinking? ;3
3 comments:
AWWW thats a cute pic. Good luck with chapter 6!
What do I know about Van? Probably nothing.
I love your pic though. I think you're an amazing artist. Even your rough sketches have the seeds of greatness in them.
No, I think your comment was right. My newest post was going to be on it, but I haven't finished the thought. Maybe later tonight or tomorrow, and I'll write about why you were right :)
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