The Sound of Falling Snow 2

My class thought The Sound of Falling Snow would be better if the present scene was written in present tense, so the differentiation between memories and actual events would be clearer. They also wanted a clearer setting in the scenes for added details (why was oranges hard to get? does Emma still live in Philly?). Oh, one interesting thing--the ending would be better without the lat paragraph, and that was actually my original intent. I suppose my reason for adding it was superfluous. Otherwise, the main comments were the same as Sincerity's--tone, imagery, and sentences were ok. I'm excited that my professor thought I should continue writing. That's the question I've wanted to ask but have been too afraid to ask :P

Ok, totally psyched to work on DS now! p(^w^)q Here's a Van "yosh, yosh" picture: